Repetition & Rhythm

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Day 14 (Write a poem that uses at least two different forms of repetition.)

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Repetition & Rhythm

It’s rhythm that taps
taps those toes
To the dance floor you go
with nobody you know
the hips sway
and sway
while the mind drifts away.
It’s away your heart goes
to place only you know
eyes glaze
in love’s daze.
Low and sweet she serenades
of yesterday’s love
a love you know
held too tight
bled in the light
til you swore no more
but here you are
on the dance floor
with another, eyes doe and bright
you know your heart’s not ready
but the rhythm
is so right.

 

This poem is playing double duty. The prompt of “repetition” is part of the 31p 31d challenge and over at the dVerse pub Anthony Desmond is having us pay poetic tribute to music. “You spin me right, round, like a record baby round, round,” has already been done. So above is my contribution. Though I feel these are two prompts that need my further attention. 🙂

29 replies
  1. brian miller
    brian miller says:

    ha. this is a fun piece…and i can feel the music a bit
    in the rock and sway of your words…and ready or not the rhythm
    is gonna catch you…smiles—swear or otherwise…

    • Delaina
      Delaina says:

      Thank you Audrey and I will looking for you on the stage as well as following your poetry. 🙂

    • Delaina
      Delaina says:

      Oh yes once brought in you just have to go with the flow. Thank you for reading and commenting!

  2. claudia
    claudia says:

    smiles… the right rhythm can surely give us that certain lightness that feels so good and probably makes us more open than we would be usually…smiles

  3. Bjorn
    Bjorn says:

    I like this .. Definitely something to dance to.. The repetitions are clearly used in a way to enhance the beat.. Just like the rhymes.

    • Delaina
      Delaina says:

      Hey Anthony!
      So nice to see you here. Your comment did spin itself into spam the spam folder.
      Thanks so much for your comments. Cheers!

    • Delaina
      Delaina says:

      Thank you Martice! I love that you read my poetry and comment on my blog. You are so awesome!

  4. katiemiafrederick
    katiemiafrederick says:

    This is Lovely.. and Truly the way i too.. sees the potential magicK of the dance and song of life…

    Without a word.. i at 54.. go Rave dancing with the young.. in the early 20’s at local metro crowded club…

    i would love to dance with anyone.. at any age.. but sadly they do not go…

    And there is magicK there truly in feat of foot.. torso.. arms.. legs.. and hips.. as they synch together in eternal flow….

    Ahh.. the non-verbal language.. of love it flows…

    Letting It ALL go.. is ecstasy as it is shared without

    a word…

    there are no disconnections.. in words of confusion..

    as Shakira says..

    hips don’t lie…

    And i always come back for more.. after going home to my wife…

    alone….

    The she wolf i am.. in wolf’s clothing.. to paraphrase and metaphor another Shakira song… where she too…

    goes home…

    alone….but nah.. connecting in spirit.. to endless souls of love.. non-verbally in the realest way and oldest way…

    of human connection.. in
    dance and song..:)

  5. Mary
    Mary says:

    Sometimes a person’s heart surprises a person in being more ready than it initially seems. Smiles. I really liked this poem..

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